To Brooklyn,

Great story, I love how at the start you said but this time it was very different. Maybe you could proof read your writing because sometimes there were some grammar mistakes. I loved how you ended it with ‘he forgot that it wasn’t a school day’

From Aiden.

To Iggy,
I really like how you included a lot of board games into the story. It was really entertaining in that way. Maybe you can slow down some moments rather than just rushing ahead and only putting a bit of detail in.
From Aiden.

To Luka,
I really like that story because it was entertaining and funny. Maybe you could think of another word instead of saying ‘then’ all of the time.
From Aiden.

To Adam,
I really liked that story. I think that the idea was great. Maybe sometimes you could make it a bit clearer who was thinking or saying what.
From Aiden.